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Another horrendous act passed
Another angry mob stood silent
“We will fight to the very last!”
They would scream
But when the time came to pass
That comment never existed it would seem

So speak up speak up my friend
Speak up to avoid world’s end

Another awful leader chosen
More outraged citizens keep mouths shut tight
Are voices become frozen?
When did we become afraid to fight?
Has this not happened before?
I thought we said not anymore

So speak up speak up my friend
Speak up to avoid world’s end

A new war declared
New people born to be killed
The power was in your hands, as you just stared
Shall we wait for all life to be stilled?
Learn from your mistakes
Advice it seems that must be impossible to take

So speak up speak up my friend
Speak up to avoid world’s end

World War III is being planned
And now the power is in your hand
Will you stand silent like so many others?
Will you watch from the background the tears of so many mothers?
Sons, husbands, family, dead all
Will you stand silent and watch the world fall?

So speak up speak up my friend
Speak up to avoid world’s end

Speak up speak up my friend
Speak up if you wish to amend
©2008-2009 ~sabre-toothed-wolf
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Author's Comments

:iconthewrittenrevolution:
Does the point of the poem get through clearly? Are the flow and rhythm good and all that stuff? Any other comments/critiques/whatever greatly appreciated

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:iconfallenfromgrace17:
:D your author comment made me laugh.

Great poem. Very strong and your voice of outrage shines through! (enough to make me back away a little bit... :D) Btw, ever heard the song Dirty Laundry? Kinda about the same thing... *goes off to clean house*

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So let me get this straight. You want to fly on a magic carpet to see the king of the potato people and plead for your freedom..... and you're telling me you're completely sane? (Arnold Rimmer from Red Dwarf)
:iconsabre-toothed-wolf:
lol ya i couldnt think of anything to put there so . . . and ty i came up with the chorus type thing at red robin in case u were curious (i had zombie and the bird and the worm stuck in my head at the same time so i somehow came up with this) and i havent whos it by?

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click [link] hypno-toad commands you

"My friends say I'm crazy
And I agree
But that's okay
That's the way I like to be"
~Hey Girl - O.A.R.
:iconfallenfromgrace17:
:D and you're welcome! Red Robin, eh? *thinks back to bad and slightly scarring Red Robin memory and shivers* Sweet! I can see the Zombie influence!;) (and it turns out my dad doesn't like the Cranberries. I almost slapped him when he told me that :D)

Gosh, when I saw The Bird and The Worm's music video, I thought I was on drugs! (not that I'd know what that would feel like, of course *twitch*) The song was awesome though.

I have no idea who the song is by. And, now that I think about the lyrics, it's more about the press ratting everyone out and stuff. I know way too many songs for my own good *le sigh* Oh well. I'll look it up... later... maybe (oh sweet sloth!) :D

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So let me get this straight. You want to fly on a magic carpet to see the king of the potato people and plead for your freedom..... and you're telling me you're completely sane? (Arnold Rimmer from Red Dwarf)
:iconsabre-toothed-wolf:
lol

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click [link] hypno-toad commands you

"My friends say I'm crazy
And I agree
But that's okay
That's the way I like to be"
~Hey Girl - O.A.R.
:iconshisuiuchiha:
rise up^^
i love the atmosphere this creates

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Fight with Blood, fight with Steel
Die with Honor, never kneel
Fear our Hearts filled with Pride
Into Glory we shall ride!

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:icondarkcameleon:
very strong concept, love it, with world war III coming up and stuff, really, very nice, well done! I would fav it if I could find the fav button :XD: .

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They call me Cyrus, a fire bender!

[link] ~ by me

*I live day by day* ~ by me

*I don't break hearts, I fix them* ~ by me
:iconsabre-toothed-wolf:
thank you so much! lol yeah it seems to be disappearing at random intervals lately

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click [link] hypno-toad commands you

"My friends say I'm crazy
And I agree
But that's okay
That's the way I like to be"
~Hey Girl - O.A.R.
:iconsabre-toothed-wolf:
thank you!

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click [link] hypno-toad commands you

"My friends say I'm crazy
And I agree
But that's okay
That's the way I like to be"
~Hey Girl - O.A.R.
:icondarkcameleon:
yeah I know, really annoying -_-" but I found it anyway :) .

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They call me Cyrus, a fire bender!

[link] ~ by me

*I live day by day* ~ by me

*I don't break hearts, I fix them* ~ by me

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